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Why hasn't anyone critiqued this? :? :lol: Well, I'll do it. It was very good, loved the story (I'm a Naruto fan! :D ) I didn't really see any mistakes, ...

Very sad. It was kind of shallow though. :? But moreover, I liked it. It was a good story. :)

A lot of repeating. But the overall story was good. I liked it. :? :)

Nice POEM (at least I know its a poem :lol: ) It was OK. It had some good parts in it, but something just didn't give it any edge. :?

No replies, thats no fun. I'll change that for you. :lol: It was good. I liked the description, but the size was a little to small. other than that, I ...

Not long enough. It was a little weird, and some of the stanzas didn't make since. :? :)

I'm like Ink hear. I wish I could give you some pointers, but I suck at poetry. Sorry, but I liked it. :) :?

Random, and kind of weird. I really had no meaning, but sometimes that is what poetry is. :? :)

Very cute! :P It was enjoyable, and not to long, making it just right. Keep up the good work! :)

It would depend on where in Asia or Australia. Like I would not go to China, but I would go to Japan. Or I would go to Sidney, but not ...

very weird. I'll say it was good, but the confusion almost got the better of me. :? :D

First off, I LOVE Japan. The culture just interests me so much. This work cuptures that culture of ancient Japan and brings it to life! Wonderful job, I really enjoyed ...

I sound very interesting. Good style and description. It has a lot of good points :D Keep it up! 8)

Funny, Confusing, I love that stuff! :lol: Very good story. The names got a little mixed up, but it was very enjoyable :D

Really good story :D ! Though I dont think it fit in with YWS. :? But other than that, very nice! 8)